Level 2 Outline

Prologue

• [POV:Jiayi / WB:Basic Setting / C1/L1/T3/D3]

Homecoming Scene

Dinner Convo and Gossip [C1/L2/T2/D3.5] [COLD OPEN]

• Jiayi tells about her life and plans in the capital during dinner [KEEP SECRET: Academy Expulsion][COLD OPEN]
  • she's a level 2 hero, might become level 3 within a year, her family is impressed and proud.
  • first time back in 5 years to see her parents after going to the capital Yanezhou's Hero Academy [SUMMARY NARRATION]
  • might join the demon hunters
    • listing out some of the orders
    • she feels drawn to want to explore, so she'll want to join the demon hunters, the order that goes out and travels around the world in hunt of demons.
• when asked said there was noone specific she wanted to marry in the capital [DL:2]
  • did not do her right of first refusal, Right Given to the Solfrey. [D4/L1/T1/C4]
    • QUICK definition of Solfrey: who are our rulers, as angels on earth [NO OTHER INFO]
    • which everyone understood means she was a virgin [unspoken narration]
  • she thinks about her romantic dreams and crushes on the solfrey boys at school before... [SEED QUESTION]
  • she knows it's impossible, as she was a commoner, almost a different species, and
  • most she could hope for was to become their toy, and she did not want that,
  • did not want her life ruined by forever chasing a love out of reach, doomed by a fantasy [UCTDAS: Conflicted feelings, wants to experience it but knows it's bad for her romantic health long term, she instinctively knows it's the right thing to do but refuses to think it through]
  • besides they paid her no mind as every single one of them was accompanied by a bevy of sex slaves who made her feel invisible and ugly, though she knows that's not the case, she is considered quite beautiful [L2/T3/C4/D4] [AROUSAL / THEME:Carefully Managed Heart / RATIONALIZE]
  • "I would love to get it out of the way, but you can't ask for a refusal when you're single" [BREADCRUMB: Red String of Fate][DL:1]
• Physical comedy of Jiayi trying to eat while fielding questions about her "success"
  • off hand internal mention of how jiayi had sent them money through the banking system in the intervening years
• They tell her about local gossip [C1/T0/D3/L2]
  • New Count Ming 7 months ago (Player Character, temporarily named Hua Ming) after his father abdicated, huge wedding, wedding gifts for the people
    • [Vital moment to build the MC character for the player, promises to return to the MC after this prologue story of the commoner girl]
    • the new count being a mage-scholar of some renown, his handsome picture printed on the wall of her living room, and how the new count snagged as wife the daughter of the duke who Len fought a war with 30 years ago.
    • it was a whole drama.
    • Yaling is the duke's daughter who fought to marry him
  • The neighborhood girl, Kieki, the pretty one who convinced herself that she was going to end up a Ji. [C3/T0/D3/L1] [FOCUS ON:Jiayi's Reaction][THEME:Erotic Power Dynamics]
    • Took her right of first refusal to one of the 6 solfrey families in the village
      • Jiayi's family laughing as they recount how she's immediately granted the refusal and had to marry a commoner student [CLARIFICATION: It's just funny because of her attitude, not a humiliation, the refusal is expected, that's what usually happens]
      • Jiayi's not laughing though, feels sympathy
    • Jiayi's thoughts:
      • She feels sorry for Kieki, she was proud, and funny but kinda delusional, Jiayi was always a lot more down to earth [D3/C4/L2/T2 / SUBTEXT:Self-Preservation / RATIONALIZE]
        • She has romantic dreams of the RoFR but would never think to take it as an option for her whole future or just assume it would work out [FILTER:Cynical Empathy]
          • most solfrey decline, that is normal, especially for solfrey who live in the village and get along with everyone, taking a local girl from her fiance as a ji is just impolite, it's not done
            • The solfrey guy, Young Pan, was well liked by everyone in the village. His father had been homeless, wandered into the village 25 years ago with nothing and escaping from gambling debts. The relatively well-to-do commoners in the village all pooled their money together to build him a beautiful big house, so that he could eventually find a solfrey wife and start a family. His son was very grateful to the villagers and would never do them any wrong. [WB: The privilege of the Solfrey and how they're structurally supported]
            • but somehow Kieki had jokingly said a couple of times that she was so beautiful, the guy, a solfrey villager she saw a many times out and about would forget all propriety and just take her, of course it didn't happen
      • the difference between the capital and the village and ow backwards they are [D3/C4/L3/T1 / SUBTEXT: Carefully Managed Heart]
        • If she got married at the capital she wouldn't even be able to find a Solfrey that would give her the time to day to take her virginity, a perfunctory court would give her permission to consummate her engagement and that would be that.
        • But in the village the rights is taken so seriously and ceremoniously, a spectacle, a rite of passage
  • [sets up erotic promise with RoFR]

Portrait Worship [T4/D3/C4/L3]

• The family kneels and pays respect to the poster of the count and wife hung up on the walls
• [Key moment, "that's me on the wall!" for the player]
• Focus on muscle memory of deference - how her body knows to bow before her mind catches up
• The smell of home cooking mixed with incense from the portrait shrine
• the worship is habitual and perfunctory [SUBTEXT ONLY]
• [HARD CUT]

With Baron & Prelate Scene [C3/L3/D3/T3]

• The next morning she travels from her home village of Gicekou, 3k people to the the next town over Frostcrane, pop 20k
  • to see her mentor, a loyalist priest who encouraged her to try to become a hero
    • She was one of the most talented in the village and was selected to become a hero by the local priest [C2/L3/T2/D4 / WB:Solfrey-Commoner Divide / THEME:Natural Hierarchy]
      • Very early on she was said to be talented at magesight and seeing the energies of the different solfrey and commoners [SENSORY:All/FILTER:Awe/Fear]
        • To her, commoners are dark, with one bright spot of light within them. Solfrey is much brighter, 2x brighter. And it's not one spot within them it's the entire body, a full aura, that makes them almost too bright to look at, washed out.
  • The priest was in her office in the hospital hall, a combination town-hall/church/hospital that is the center of town religious, social, and medical life.
  • She notices the Jiayi is certified by the Nartho instead of the Yan as expected.
    • Jiayi feels embarrassment but thankfully the priest didn't dwell on it.
  • She tells her that she was achieved her goal of becoming a hero, harnessing her body and her will to the service of the Church, King, and Solfrey.
  • The priest is proud of her of course, but also gently lectures her that her quest to become a demon hunter she must not forget to save her own soul. Only a Solfrey can bring her soul to heaven with them, and it is not selfish to want to become a Miya. [BENEVOLENT INDOCTRINATION][L3: Some wisdom about purpose of life and achieving true fulfillment at the end]
    • [Full exposition about miya concept]
    • Jiayi says if only she would be so lucky, to find a solfrey that would accept her service... she just doesn't know how to attract attention like that.
    • Internal thoughts:
      • She has positive feelings towards wanting to be a miya, she has frequently dreamed of being a Miya, and this was a dream that was emphasized to her many times during her study in the academy, and now she imagines marrying a commoner husband who was also a Miya to the same Solfrey.
      • but trying to get close to a solfrey on purpose seems like a crazy thing to her
      • Kieki was pretty, and it didn't work for her, at least not like that
      • It's not something you can try for, it either happens or not
      • But really, being a Ji is not a good way to do it
    • The priest tells her, well maybe while she saves the world hunting demons, she'll meet a solfrey who will save her. [MOOD: ROMANTIC, LIGHT]
    • The priest performs the pre-Lifting on her. [C4/D3/T1/L3][WB: Heroic Binding, Black Curse, Lifting, the cost of being a hero / FILTER: Objective, factual, no value judgement][SUBTEXT: institutional bondage]
      • As always Jiayi feels a huge relief after each ritual
• Baron Rong, the Baron of Frostcrane and his wife and daughter (Xueya Rong) surprisingly walks into office unannounced. [C3/L3/D4/T3 / TURN:Casual to Tense]
  • She bolts up and kneels to them in surprise. Go into detail about her embarrassing and ostentatious obsequiousness to them. [D4 / SENSORY:ALL]
    • Be creative about how she acts, include kowtow and how she is afraid of looking at them in the eye.
    • The family is talking to the prelate.
    • As a horny girl she immediately has thoughts about seducing the handsome (56yo) baron, being made to serve, perhaps becoming his bodyguard, and in bed, she pushes away those thoughts in embarrassment [INTRUSIVE THOUGHT / COMPLICIT / AROUSAL] [Make this longer, more erotic, hotter]
  • intense magesight experience description [INTRUSIVE THOUGHT / COMPLICIT]
  • The Magesight Experience: Her magesight flares, and the Baron's aura is a crushing weight, a brilliant, commanding light that makes her feel small and insignificant. It validates her physical reaction on a spiritual level. [FIXATE:Power]
  • When she looks up and notices the daughter, and she feels suddenly ashamed that she was thinking about seducing her father. [FILTER:Shame]
    • At this point in the story why she wants to seduce the baron is unexplained.
    • The contrast between her sordid thoughts and the pure, privileged presence of the daughter makes her feel dirty. She is ashamed not just of the thought, but of her own nature.
  • Describe her feelings towards the daughter, who's slightly younger than her, her complicated feelings of subservience since she's a Solfrey but also jealousy at how she looks weak but has so much power and privilege.
    • The prevailing feeling is awe and fear (in the bliblical sense) of her [EMOTIONAL LOGIC: It doesn't make sense because Jiayi is older and trained to be a warrior hero]
      • the jealousy is a undercurrent, it's a sort of resigned sense of how different and otherworldly she is to jiayi
      • glad about her wearing longer pants, so that she's not visibly dripping.
  • The baron is polite to the priest but visibly distressed
    • telling the priest about how his daughter (Dou Rong) is still missing after a week
    • some conversation
• Though that was not in the plans, Jiayi has no choice but to agree and spends the day getting authorized and being filled in with information. [C1/L2/D3/T1]
  • Case details: Lady Dou Rong couldn't be found ever since she went to the duke's palace (Duke Meng Chun) in Noulan. The duke insists that she never arrived while the carriage drivers insist that they left her outside the Duke's castle.
  • The driver, etc is not really suspected because commoners are far weaker than solfrey in magic, even asleep solfrey is wrapped by magical shields that make them fully invulnerable to commoner attacks, except from certified heroes.
    • [important piece of world building]
    • But could wonder if everything has to be checked, crazy things have happened, commoners could get stronger than they are allowed, paranoid thoughts from the baron out of grief
    • [sets up false concepts of maybe the rules of the world are being overturned]
  • The baron is impressed that she is a local hero who went to the capital but was from here. He decides to hire her on the spot to help find clues about the missing daughter.
  • Well suddenly she has a job and might not return to the capital for a while.
  • told to work independently and ignore the constable, don't want them to work together and get influenced, feels weird about the constable and how it's unbelievable that his daughter is not found yet

Quick Investigation Summary [C0/L2/D2/T1]

• The next day she begins asking around for information on the daughter [SUMMARY NARRATION]
  • Decides to take a different strategy from the official investigation, which is focused on the road to Noulan. She decides to look for servants or other commoners who may have seen her or known her, to piece together her life before the trip.
• Met with a number of different people [SUMMARY NARRATION]
  • Tried to find leads, didn't really, only heard some remarks of people being annoyed at the nobility, maybe it's relevant to the disappearance? [RED HERRING]
  • heard criticism about the new count, some like him less than his father [WB: Not everyone loves MC, world isn't a unrealistically easy]
    • he apparently is moving to cut social programs and business subsidies
    • getting rid of tax exemptions
    • grumblings against the nobility who support him
    • job losses
  • eventually a commoner tells her to meet somewhere in the woods, would show her a clue

With You the Necromancer

Mini transition scene [PAYOFF:Mageknight Abilities / TURN:Failure]

• The next morning she's following a lead into the forest [C2/L3/D3/T0]
  • There she is ambushed by undead, there's a battle, where she utilizes the full range of her combat capabilities but she's still overwhelmed captured
  • She summoners her magical sword and shields over her robes, both are ethereal, made of pure magical energy
• [JUMP CUT]
• Action paragraph, just disorienting fighting and overwhelmed, no clarity in what actually happens [D4/L2/C3/T3]
• [HARD CUT]

Taken [C3/L3/T4/D3.5/ DL:0 / SENSORY:All, Grunts, Moans, Touch, etc / EMOTIONAL:Terror and Desire / PAYOFF:Power Fantasy][POV: Jiayi]

• She is taken, her head pounding from a concussion and wounds, into a ritual chamber where she is sexually broken by the necromancer.
  • She wakes up naked, restrained, gagged
  • Tied to a ritual alter
  • POV Jiayi, but the Count/Necromancer is addressed in the second person "You".
  • You penetrate through her personal spiritual defenses and takes possession over her soul after a sexual struggle as [D4][POV: Jiayi]
  • you tame and control her body. [D4][POV: Jiayi]
  • Extremely erotic scene, as she is a virgin, you are an amazing lover, it felt so good, intense, not just her pussy, hitting her walls deep inside, but also all over her body, she is held down, so erotically, unable to use magic to fight him off, this feeling over being overwhelmed, pushed down, it's nothing she's ever experienced before.
  • She can feel him seizing her soul, didn't realize that her soul could even be felt like this, like a sacred part of her, and he's taking it, making it his, doing with it as he wills. [D4]
  • She cums [CATHARSIS]
  • Describe the MC, the necromancer, his heavy body, his muscles, how she can't move her eyes away [D4]
  • It feels incredible [L3/D4]
  • He's moving within her [L3/D4]
  • Grunts, sweat, [SENSORY:ALL]
  • Afterwards she feels the cum inside but she feels magic preventing insemination, it's magic that all solfrey can do when having sex with commoners that give them full control over reproduction. [WB: Solfrey Power]
  • Of course the necro is preventing it, and she feels resentful about that, she tries to subconsciously hold him in and make it happen but her magic doesn't work. It feels like the rejection she's felt back in academy, where they just ignored her, like the necro doesn't think she's worth bearing his children. [L2/D4 / BUTTON]
  • Cum and tears mix on her thighs [L3/D3]
• Ends with abject terror, the loss of her soul, being controlled by the necromancer, she halpless struggle only lasts as long as until he gets a grasp on her soul, and then, just terror. [L2/D4]
  • She's no longer able to operate, move, think independently, she's his... she realizes. He's taken it, made it into his tool, and it just feels like she belongs to him, like there was no questioning it.
  • Thinking about her dreams of saving the world from demons, but now she'll be a slave of an evil even worse than demons. But even though she knows this, it's still... this is what it is, resisting is unthinkable, literally, she is incapable of thinking about resisting. She can only make wry observations about how she is a person that is wholly his.
• [HARD CUT]